Tuesday, May 25, 2010
Gloria and Mary
As part of writing, the Rainbows group were given a task to write a paragraph about a volcano in pairs. This is what Gloria and Mary came up with.
We took one sentence and decided to deconstruct it as whole class.
A magma came out of the volcano and make the big ash come out of the volcano and the magma looks like a river.
Can you see what is wrong with this sentence?
After deconstructing this sentence with the class. Here is what we came up with.
Magma comes out and makes a big cloud of ash and it looks like a river.